Chapter 07 - Page 04

posted October 22nd, 2012, 1:22 am


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October 22nd, 2012, 1:22 am

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Don't have much to say-- pretty tuckered out from hockey tournament this weekend. We came in second place, wooo.

Have a nice day~ or night, as it were.

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October 22nd, 2017, 7:46 pm

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October 22nd, 2012, 2:45 pm

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Congrats on coming in second place. My favorite number is 2.

Creative picture transition panels on the bottom, I like how the smoke lingering connects the last three panels. I got a little lost which person was saying what in the bottom center panels. Maybe word speech bubble tails coming from the speaker's direction would help. Also, I think you meant to use the word "thinks" versus "things" in the second to last speech bubble.

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October 23rd, 2012, 5:26 pm

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@Living Rock: Woah! A typo! I must have been more exhausted than I thought o_o
and the bubbles... not sure how I thought that would work, looking on it now.

Thank you for pointing that out!
Gave fixing it a try, hope it works better? =3

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October 24th, 2012, 7:51 am

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The changes you made look good. It is much clearer who is saying what.

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October 29th, 2012, 12:38 am

HKim

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Congratulations on your ranking!

Definitely think Rock's recommendations work better. I still had some trouble figuring out who was speaking, but looking closer, I was able to figure it out.

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November 17th, 2012, 6:26 pm

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@HKim: Dang. . . Yeah, not sure how this page went so wrong, ahaha...

Hopefully will avoid that in the future, been meaning to experiment with panels but this time it went awry, looks like xD;
Thanks for the feedback~

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